Wednesday, March 30, 2011

The Secret

This is an unfinished short story Anna is working on right now.  She asked me to post what she has done so far, so here you go!  :)  I'm putting what she forgot to write out in parentheses, but the rest is what she wrote, word for word, with slight spelling and grammar corrections from me.  She wanted me to be her editor.  ;)

Anna's notes on the story:
"Warning, I am a beginner."
"This story is about a little girl named Karinah.  She finds a door in the basement behind a dresser.  She finds a skeleton.  Who is he/she?  What is he/she doing in there?  Read and find out!"

In a house not too far from yours, there is a little girl.  She just moved in.  She had come from a little town in New Jersey.

When she went to her room, there was a dresser in it.  It was the room she had been told she could have.  She unpacked her five boxes and put them away when her mom had called her down for dinner.

"Karinah, come down for dinner!"

"Okay mom, coming!"

"Hey there squirt!"  Said her brother Andrew.

"Don't call me that!"  She said.

"I can do whatever I want!"  He said.

"Mom!  Andrew called me a squirt!"

"Andrew, knock it off!"

"Okay."  And they went down for dinner, glaring at each other angrily.

"Where are your manners?"  Their mother said.  "Quit glaring at each other and eat your dinner!"  She ordered.

Just then, the loud doorbell rang.  "I'll get it!" said Karinah excitedly.  A boy was at the door.  "Hello!"  said Karinah, excited and confused.

"Hi, I'm Andy."

"Hi, I am Karinah."

"I need to warn you."


"A bad man used to live here in your house."

"No!"  She said.

"Yes!  When he moved, I snuck into your house.  You should look behind every piece of furniture to be sure."

"Okay, bye!"  (Karinah returns to the table but is too excited to eat)  "Mom, can I be excused?"


Karinah went to her room and moved the dresser, and there was a crawl space (behind it).  She opened it, but it was dark.  She turned on a light and there was a skeleton!

Her parents had just left for a party (after dinner), so her brother was in charge.  She told him what she found, paid him $10 not to tell (their parents), and (her brother) called the police.

The Sheriff told her the skeleton's name was Josh Carpool.  He also told her that he was a bank owner (he was wearing a suit with a name tag from the bank).  She could picture him working in the bank, a tall 35 year old with black hair, standing in front of the bank.  He was pulling a few plugs on an ATM.  She wanted to solve the mystery herself.

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